That Time Merit Was in a Band (Part 1)

I visited the wonderful Magical Words again this week to discuss character development, andΒ that time Merit was in a band…

I’ll let you read the MW post for the details, but basically in a very, very, very early (Mary Sue) iteration of Merit, she was in a band. Malik and Mallory were her friends, and a certain Mr. Greer was her vampiric enemy. Kind of. πŸ™‚

Since I ‘fessed up about her early origins, I thought it would be fun to take a look back. Β So below, without further ado, is a never-before-seen chunk of that first story, which I’d named THE DEVIL YOU KNOW. Β I think you’ll recognize some names, and at least some bits of the characters. πŸ™‚

Enjoy it in its campy awfulness!



The clock on the wall ticked ominously, and I raised my head to see that it was finally 3:50. Class was over.

I waved my hand. β€œThanks, everybody. We’ll finish this on Monday, and I want to see a copy of your outlines.”  Nearly a hundred of our nation’s future leaders grabbed their books, stuffed their satchels, and padded down the lecture hall’s carpeted stairs and out of the room. No stragglers today, apparently, so I erased the board where I’d scribbled a few notes, picked up my folder and bag, and followed them out.

A deep baritone echoed behind me as I entered the classroom building’s hallway.

β€œHey, teacher.”  I turned.

Standing behind me was my ex-roommate, Malik Cleary.Β  Malik was a graduate student like meβ€”his work was in Biochemistry, mine in English. We’d roomed together our first year of graduate schoolβ€”both responding to the Graduate Studies Department’s Roommate Finder Servicesβ€”until he’d met his fiancΓ©, Sarah, and left my apartment for hers. He walked toward me, tall, coffee-skinned, beautiful.

β€œHey, M. Your hair’s getting longer,” I said, pulling at the end of a dread. His hair was fashionably shaggy, in tight dreads that just skimmed his shoulders. β€œWhat does Sarah think about that?”

He gave a grand smile.

β€œKate, with so much man, that’s the last thing she worries about.”

Did I mention Malik is an unreformed flirt?